He fell first

[Freaky]

(late night/ early morn scribblings)


He fell first
Because she had fallen before
And concluded - love was not her path to explore

He fell first
Because she was busy gawking at their similarity,
Two negatives make a positive - was now a proven reality.

He fell first
And sure enough she followed his steps
As he gracefully sabotaged all her singlehood preps.

He fell first
Because he was the light and she, just a noise
Took some while to believe he was different than the previous boys.

He fell first
Because he didn't shy away from accepting fate
Her hesitance, his patience paved way to the fruitful wait.

He fell first
Just diving into the depths, but she fell
with each step, so hard, even the mountains could tell.



Any errors or suggestions, please do tell.
Thank you !

 

[00Wolfie00]

It is just simply mesmerising, instant noodles maybe?

 

[imprettywhenicry]

Any errors or suggestions, please do tell.

No suggestions just compliments and appreciation

 

[Freaky]

It is just simply mesmerising, instant noodles maybe?

Not really, just my lazy bum got down to write it.

 

[Freaky]

No suggestions just compliments and appreciation

Thank you muah

 

[00Wolfie00]

Not really, just my lazy bum got down to write it.

Loved it

 

[Dr OxyGeN]

(late night/ early morn scribblings)


He fell first
Because she had fallen before
And concluded - love was not her path to explore

He fell first
Because she was busy gawking at their similarity,
Two negatives make a positive - was now a proven reality.

He fell first
And sure enough she followed his steps
As he gracefully sabotaged all her singlehood preps.

He fell first
Because he was the light and she, just a noise
Took some while to believe he was different than the previous boys.

He fell first
Because he didn't shy away from accepting fate
Her hesitance, his patience paved way to the fruitful wait.

He fell first
Just diving into the depths, but she fell
with each step, so hard, even the mountains could tell.



Any errors or suggestions, please do tell.
Thank you !

No errors... Lovely
I fell first

 

[00Wolfie00]

Eagerly waiting for "He Comes First"

 

[Mithi]

(late night/ early morn scribblings)


He fell first
Because she had fallen before
And concluded - love was not her path to explore

He fell first
Because she was busy gawking at their similarity,
Two negatives make a positive - was now a proven reality.

He fell first
And sure enough she followed his steps
As he gracefully sabotaged all her singlehood preps.

He fell first
Because he was the light and she, just a noise
Took some while to believe he was different than the previous boys.

He fell first
Because he didn't shy away from accepting fate
Her hesitance, his patience paved way to the fruitful wait.

He fell first
Just diving into the depths, but she fell
with each step, so hard, even the mountains could tell.



Any errors or suggestions, please do tell.
Thank you !

Nice

 

[Mathi_z]

I fell in very heavy lust

 

[URum]

Amazing

 

[SPIRIT]

(late night/ early morn scribblings)


He fell first
Because she had fallen before
And concluded - love was not her path to explore

He fell first
Because she was busy gawking at their similarity,
Two negatives make a positive - was now a proven reality.

He fell first
And sure enough she followed his steps
As he gracefully sabotaged all her singlehood preps.

He fell first
Because he was the light and she, just a noise
Took some while to believe he was different than the previous boys.

He fell first
Because he didn't shy away from accepting fate
Her hesitance, his patience paved way to the fruitful wait.

He fell first
Just diving into the depths, but she fell
with each step, so hard, even the mountains could tell.



Any errors or suggestions, please do tell.
Thank you !

Freaky at her freak!! Amazing poem bonu with deep stuff. Yours are usually abstract, that's why I have to pay some more efforts to get them and those are really fruitful at the end.

 

[Freaky]

Eagerly waiting for "He Comes First"

Lol I'll try

I fell in very heavy lust

I will pray for you

 

[Bishamonten]

(late night/ early morn scribblings)


He fell first
Because she had fallen before
And concluded - love was not her path to explore

He fell first
Because she was busy gawking at their similarity,
Two negatives make a positive - was now a proven reality.

He fell first
And sure enough she followed his steps
As he gracefully sabotaged all her singlehood preps.

He fell first
Because he was the light and she, just a noise
Took some while to believe he was different than the previous boys.

He fell first
Because he didn't shy away from accepting fate
Her hesitance, his patience paved way to the fruitful wait.

He fell first
Just diving into the depths, but she fell
with each step, so hard, even the mountains could tell.



Any errors or suggestions, please do tell.
Thank you !

Falling for you after reading your poems, always !!
You are one of my fav poetess, your poems are amazing like you, keep it up

 

[Dom55]

(late night/ early morn scribblings)


He fell first
Because she had fallen before
And concluded - love was not her path to explore

He fell first
Because she was busy gawking at their similarity,
Two negatives make a positive - was now a proven reality.

He fell first
And sure enough she followed his steps
As he gracefully sabotaged all her singlehood preps.

He fell first
Because he was the light and she, just a noise
Took some while to believe he was different than the previous boys.

He fell first
Because he didn't shy away from accepting fate
Her hesitance, his patience paved way to the fruitful wait.

He fell first
Just diving into the depths, but she fell
with each step, so hard, even the mountains could tell.



Any errors or suggestions, please do tell.
Thank you !

If scribblings gets us extra ordinary poems , what would be the result of sincere efforts. Hats off